Things to be added/changed:
-remove redundancies from abstract: are all of these qualifiers (adverbs/adjectives) necessary? Sentence four is a run-on, and unclear. Mention primary texts and their import
-use MLA. Why paragraph numbers? None of your references is paginated?
-careful with subject-verb agreement
-why do you only cite/paraphrase—and never quote?
-isn’t the world still patriarchal?
-go through the entire piece with a fine-toothed grammar comb. It’s replete with grammatical and sentence-level errors.
-fix Works Cited. Entries need to be in alphabetical order (and not numbered)
-hero (male); heroine (female). Captain Marvel is not a heroine. Plus he’s a character (not a book or film), so no italics. Similar confusion throughout in light of _Wonder Woman_ vs Wonder Woman (the first a text; the second, the character)
-standardize superheroine as one word throughout draft
-do work for your readers: who’s Hawk [G]irl a female version of, for example?
-be careful with ‘occidentalism’. Note that western mythology galvanises under white exceptionalism, perhaps especially in the Cold War. White, male, American superheroes fantastically fetishise white exceptionalism.
-unpack/explain: ‘mythological ideologies’, ‘socio-historic enhancement’ and other ambiguous coinages
-note that female, feminine, and woman are not synonyms
-capitalise World War II
-why is 1941 ‘the peak of social and civil changes’? You’re insinuating these ‘birthed’ women fed the social change of the 60s? Unclear. Certainly the postwar period makes evident to women that there’s more to life than kids and the kitchen. See Friedan’s _The Feminine Mystique_ (1963)
-Wonder Woman, too, it must be stated, televisually became a symbol of Reaganism in the 80’s. How successfully does the latest Hollywood WW ‘correct’ that 80s Republican WW?
Please be aware that the paper has to be at least 7,000 words and there’re 6,000 words currently.