You bring in a strong set of examples and show that there are both comic and tragic elements that blend together in the play.
For the next draft, you need to work on your thesis statement. Right now, you have a clear topic and some observations, but not a strong argument; you’re saying that comedy and tragedy mix, but you’re not making a claim about why that is important. As a result, your essay is more like a list of examples than a true argument. As you work on the revision, your first priority should be to think about why Shakespeare mixes comedy and tragedy together. This is a comedy first and foremost; audiences would have known it is a comedy going in. Why does he then give it so many dark aspects? Is he saying something about the nature of comedy? Is he making social commentary?
Once you have a thesis, you should integrate it into every sub-argument you make, and focus on using evidence to support your strongest claims. Your paragraphs tend to drift a bit too much into plot summary, and you sometimes use quotations to describe more than to analyze.